DEDICATION
Just put:
to Seán
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I split each of what follows into three:
first line is the page number; then there is the
instruction, beginning with the line location of the error; on the last line is
how the correction should thus and newly be rendered ;)
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10.
7 lines
from the bottom
Insert ‘his’
Insert ‘his’
conducted
his monstrous online battles.
19.
Top line
remove ‘within me but something’
remove ‘within me but something’
, but
something about this term struck me as deadly
19.
Very end
of first paragraph
remove word ‘historic’ as the word is repeated from above.
remove word ‘historic’ as the word is repeated from above.
one of
Edinburgh’s most important artefacts.
29.
Fourth
line from the bottom of the first paragraph
‘mobilised’ is a repetition from above, so remove ‘mobilised and’
‘mobilised’ is a repetition from above, so remove ‘mobilised and’
to which
I belonged had begun to care more carefully
30.
First
bold quote
remove full stop
remove full stop
yanking
his chain isn’t funny
32.
Second
paragraph from the foot
italicise ‘The Scotsman’
italicise ‘The Scotsman’
The
Scotsman
35.
Final
line
insert comma after ‘not’; remove ‘at least online’; insert comma after ‘been’
insert comma after ‘not’; remove ‘at least online’; insert comma after ‘been’
Dad was
not, and had never been, real.
37.
5 lines
from the foot.
Replace
‘white haired dear’ with ‘woman’
The woman
wiped her hands on her apron
40.
Line 5
Replace
‘only a Skype call with Mum to look forward to’ with ‘nothing else to do,’
With
nothing else to do, I was in no hurry
40.
Line 12
Add a
comma after the word ‘either’
beyond
the potentialities of either, and although
45.
10 lines
from the foot
Add a
comma and ‘but’ after ‘into my pocket’
hand into
my pocket, but there was nothing there
46.
9 lines
down
Repunctuate
‘friend’s’ for more than one friend
I saw my
new friends’ face glow
51.
Top line
Insert a
comma after ‘profiles’
insulting
profiles, threats and fake accounts
51.
8 lines
down
Capitalise
the ‘s’ in LIKEs
Facebook
LIKES for this?’
59.
7 lines
from the bottom
Because
‘shook’ is repeated from above, replace it with ‘poured’
Barry
finished the flask and poured the last few
61.
Third
paragraph from the foot
Correct
‘He did each day he’ error in sense by replacing ‘He did each day’ with ‘and’
He looked
well and he passed the computers
61.
Third
line from foot
Capital P
for ‘Scottish parliament’
on the
Scottish Parliament website,
67.
14 lines
from foot
Replace
‘across’ with ‘along’
I glanced
along the bar,
71.
Two lines
from foot
Change
‘an enemy’ to ‘a friend’
thought
to be a friend of mine against me by
72.
Top line
Add the
name ‘Walfrid’
It was
Dad himself writing about the blogger I had met, Walfrid.
75.
Third
line down
Add a
comma after ‘bicycle’ and remove ‘slowly’
Iain
looked at the second bicycle, suspiciously turning
87.
Fourth
line from the foot
Add a
comma after ‘could’ and replace ‘and all’ with ‘onwards through’
as much
evidence of our discovery as he could, having worked onwards through the night.
88.
Fourth
line down
Replace
‘doxes’ with ‘documents’
Iain had
documents on at least 100
90.
Line 12
Insert
‘so I can’ between ‘patterns’ and ‘see’
Trying to
find patterns so I can see who is
93.
Line 7
Insert
‘Fake’ before ‘Maps’ at start of sentence
Fake maps
with fake shops with fake websites.
96.
Bold
insert
Change
second ‘yous’ to ‘yous you’
get it up
you yous fat indy
102.
Line 19
Because
of repetition of ‘boy’ change second ‘boy’ to ‘lad’
Anyway
lad, you were Scottish the last time I saw you
104.
6 lines
from the foot
Because
of a repetition of ‘looking’ as ‘look’ in previous line change ‘looking
through’ to ‘searching’
It looked
like they had been searching the lists
105.
6 lines
from foot
Change
‘named’ to ‘some at’
fake
voters included some at addresses from
123.
First
line
Insert
‘I’ between ‘and’ and ‘browsed’
it
disappeared and I browsed the logs
123.
Remove 5th
para of the bold insert, ie the two bold lines ‘#Yes voters Sandy Steward’ to
‘back to you Sandy’
125. to 126.
Suggest
remove all the bold inserts between ‘I glanced at the scrap that was left.' on
page 125 to ‘These were printouts from Dad’s work.’
i.e.
remove from ‘It was years ago that’ on p.125. to ‘against the left
and right’ on p.126.
This long
insert adds nothing, possibly even
confuses things more, and we already have explanations. This is such a big remove (24 lines) it will
affect the typesetting of the rest of the book, I am afraid.
‘I
thought that,’ he said. ‘It’s odd that they took that too.’
I glanced
at the scrap that was left.
These
were printouts from Dad’s work.
‘Can you
think of anyone who would have known about…
137.
Line 14
Add a
comma between ‘from’ and ‘and’
Blackness
and where the votes came from, and ended up staying in his guest house.’
137.
Line 18
Change
‘But’ to ‘And’
And while
we were fighting
142.
First
line
Change
‘that’s’ to ‘it’s’
‘He says
it’s the file location
150.
Nine
lines from foot
Replace
‘still’ with ‘yet’
job
satisfaction was still a possibility, it yet appeared
150.
Three
lines form foot
Replace
‘Since then’ with ‘What’s more’ and remove ‘however’
What’s
more I felt that I had
153.
Line 12
Replace
the first comma with a full stop and start a new sentence.
There was
absolutely no reason why it would not work.
That cold day, that late winter moment
154.
Final two
lines
Remove
‘and’ after ‘returned’ and include a full stop.
Replace ‘starting’ with ‘We’d start’
we’d be
changing that as soon as my friends returned. We’d start up a second
154.
Final
line
Replace
final full stop with a semi-colon. Add
‘perfect for our island nations . . . ‘
We’d be
changing that as soon as my friends returned.
And
one
conducted through the earth; perfect for our island nations . . .
Thanks, one should strive to get this right before sending you corrections with less than one month before publication, but I really appreciate it and the book looks great, Peter
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